ตัวอย่างการตรวจ English Proofreading & Editing ชุดที่ 15

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Customer behaviour means behaviour of each individual, which be expression in order to select to use the best items or production. They expect that merchandise is able to response demand of consumer goods. Mostly, the actions of each individual have direct related to use and acquire goods.

Customer behaviour refers to individual attitudes regarding item selection and purchase. Customers expect merchandisers to respond to their demands. The actions of each individual are directly related to the use and acquisition of goods.

Because: The paragraph is now written in the same tense (present), with clear subject matter and conclusion for each sentence.  Clarity of meaning is improved and the word count is reduced.