ตัวอย่างการตรวจ English Proofreading & Editing ชุดที่ 5

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In discussion and final conclusion are comprehensively presented about the presenting of the extent literature and the direction of future research in the field of BCP.

A discussion and final conclusion suggests ideas for the direction of future research in the field of BCP.

Because:

1. Presented and presenting used in the same sentence
2. Change of tense, past to present for recommendations
3. Simplification without loss of meaning
4. Word reduction 30% (26 to 18 words)