ตัวอย่างการตรวจ English Proofreading & Editing ชุดที่ 3

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Tabulation was used to display coping mechanism of health care personnel and children’s parents to mitigate the effect of JE vaccine shortage during the 2010-2012 fiscal years.

To coping mechanisms of health care personnel and parents to mitigate the effect of the JE vaccine shortage during the 2010-2012 fiscal years were tabulated.

Because:

1. Move important topic (coping mechanisms) to be the subject of the sentence.
2. Remove the possessive apostrophe and simplify.